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wow, all i can say is wow! its very well written and it captures the very intense and sometimes, well mostly, sexual and desirable feelings someone gets when in love or in lust. *applause*

the compliment is well taken and appreciated! Im glad you seen the desired feel of it, and indeed, intense emotions like you said (desire) are often expressed as such.
thank you, once again!

Such a beautiful poem, very expresive

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one of the easier, more familiar ones of mine....i wish i could find theothers i had like it....

It is the smell of the river
the push of the oars, the parting of the water
two lovers together

... those lines in particular appeal to me, highly poetic and intellectually arousing. I'm not a fan of "..." at all in poetry, I always feel the required flow can be gained from the words alone. Also, the intermixed "I" and "i" seem a bit odd; is there a reason for that?

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James

I really like this.. especially the flow of 'it is a rose upon the marbled floor'. I so love that line.

I love how you write here. Just beautiful. especially also
'The man and woman, beneath the hearth
as the muses play their song....'

There are just three spelling errors in the last stanza. You need to change the single i to I.
ie. 'i taste it, i hear it' should be 'I taste it, I hear it'.

It flows and works much better. A very striking and thought provoking poem however.

I love the imagery that your words invoke in my mind. 'the push of the oars, the parting of the water'... I can see it if only I let myself go. I can see the murky water... with just the hint of danger of crocodiles.. or just of the unknown. I see and feel the calm ripples of the water subsiding against the soft strokes of the wooden oars, splitting its surface. Fave.

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I like it so much!

thank you, so much...it was easy working with, the quality of the image was amazing

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